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by **Mad Dan Eccles** on Mon Feb 04, 2008 9:53 pm

Il y a un PDF.

It will be there until the weekend. Get it while it's PDF-shaped.

Comments about dividing Part I into 2 will be gratefully received.

by **challenge** on Mon Feb 04, 2008 11:40 pm

Mad Dan Eccles wrote:Get it while it's PDF-shaped.

Comments about dividing Part I into 2 will be gratefully received.

And it's beautiful

soooo fun to read it all together.... *giggles* and now I kind of have inspiration for the next part with the Pub and all...

thanks MDE!!

by **Octavia** on Tue Feb 05, 2008 7:51 am

Hey, cool!

However you jiggle it round, though, you definitely still have to end a Part on Slater driving into the darkness in tears. That's priceless...

by **Mad Dan Eccles** on Tue Feb 05, 2008 9:12 am

I'm tempted to leave that ending as it is, and put in a break after

“Goodbye,” Michel whispered to her retreating back. Verdomme! What was a woman like that doing with an invertebrate accountant?

-- just before Max and Toni start prowling around. That's a natural break in time, and leads naturally to calling it "The Wake".

Part I -- The Funeral
Part II -- The Wake
Part III -- The Lab
Part IV -- The Volunteer, which is not only the name of the pub, but a foreshadowing.

And I want to use the phrase 'invertebrate accountant' at least once more

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